Have you ever looked up at a Midday Sun,
Shining through the weeping forest canopies.
A golden glowing furnace, that’s larger than life.
Glaring down, from there above.
Have you ever flown up to touch the Midday Sun,
Travelling through that deep blue sky and beyond.
A vortex of colour, like a rainbow’s many hues.
Cascading down, from there above.
Have you ever been blinded by the Midday Sun.
By that purity of brilliant white.
Forcing your burning eyelids to shut tight.
The Corona’s fiery circles intensely bright.
Like an Angels alluring halo of slivering light.
Enchanting to your mesmerized sight.
Encapsulating a lover’s first flight.
And scorching your heart’s delights.
Ivor Steven.
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Hmmm, not sure,
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About my butterfly or your poem? βΊοΈ
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Oh sorry, your butterfly, didn’t come through, and I’m not sure about my poem, it didn’t seem to convey my thoughts, but maybe I’m hard on myself.
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Oh doesnβt it?
I think itβs a good poem Ivor π
Yes youβre being hard on yourself
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My answer to much of this is…yes.
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Beautiful Ivor…that midday sun…
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Lovely Ivor. I wish I had that midday sun of yours, it’s raining here and I would very much like to feel a little warmth on my face.
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This is a gorgeous poem.πΉ Unfortunately here in England I think it’ll be a while before I see such a sun! π³
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I love the way the tempo changes in the third sataza. The first two stanzas are contemplative, and then something happens with all those rhyming lines. There’s a sense of speeding up, of power and excitement.
Beautifully done…
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Thanks Jane, I actually Googled sataza, a Indian Restaurant in Chicago, and Hindu word for seven. …… I’m not happy with my finishing line, I was very tired, and now that I read it this morning, it doesn’t work !! haha, but I’m stuck for words.
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Did you ever see the movie, The Magnificent Sataza? π
The finishing line looks good to me – though maybe a bit long – you could break it up into two lines but I have an idea you still wouldn’t be happy with it, and it’s your poem, so only you know the effect you’re after.
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Thanks Jane, I’ll take my poem with me today, and see if my day’s activities enlighten me …..
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Hi Jane, I’ve reworded the last two lines, and the new words are definitely more like the feeling I was trying to capture…..
“Encapsulating a lover’s first flight.
And scorching your heart’s delights.
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Sounds good – I’ll go over to your blog and read the whole poem again.
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That’s perfect!
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Yes !! I thought so too….
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I don’t know how I turned the word stanza into sataza, but I like the word, and I might find a way of using it again π
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Ah, I enjoy basking in your sun warmed words, man.
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Haha, sunny Geelong.
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Is it finally sunny and warm there in Geelong, Ivor?
(PR)
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Yep, it’s taken a while, so I had to write something about the Sun….
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I love this and it reminds me of the poem Iβm posting tomorrow. Itβs called Rainbow Wishes.
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Feels like a perfect day when I’m reading this:)
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It was a bright sunny day, thank you, and I was trying to convey a feeling of how the Sun is a beautiful and powerful energy, that brings both life and love to our hearts……
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I have, Ivor, I have. It’s strange how too much light can lead to the opposite isn’t it? Too much light and darkness finds a way in. Hmmm. Thoughtful now
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“There’s a crack in everything, that’s how the light gets in.”
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Wonderful π I am a true sun lover and we get plenty of it here in California.. it makes all things right π
This poem is the same – the essence of perfection –
So beautifully written..
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Yes everytime I look at the sun I’m in wondrous awe. Thank you for reading my piece. π
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Thank you for sharing π
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