Again it’s that time of the week where I present another ‘5min’ poem that I have written at one of Ali Grimsham’s ‘Writing Circle’ Zoom meetings that I attend on Monday’s, and this was my 4rd session with the group, and I am having a fantastic time … Here is the page link to get more information about the next writing circle. https://flashlightbatteries.blog/online-writing-circles/ Tickets by donation. All are welcome.
Who Hears Me
My ears are funnels
But I do not want to hear
The voices
My lips do part
But I do not speak
The words
My knees do bend
But I cannot sit
While I can still stand
My eyes are open
But I do not want to see
My shadow falling
Ivor Steven (c) Feb 2021
Your poetry sessions are producing great results.
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They provide a great stimulating atmosphere Sadje..
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How wonderful. 👍👍👍
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You sound satirical but realistic. Simply nice.
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Maybe some realistic recollections 😊
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I don’t know what to say other than “wonderful” Ivor!
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Thank you Mary… yes a difficult situation to put into words, …😀🙄
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Ivor, I found this beautifully-written poem chilling. It is a very vivid description of a terrifying experience, perhaps a medical emergency. I hope, if this is a personal account, it is never repeated! ❤ Take care.
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Thank you Cheryl, yes very much my personal experience of lying in a hospital bed after suffering a stroke,… this has happened 3 times, and hopefully I have had my share.. 😊
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Yes, You certainly have had your share. I appreciate your forthrightness in writing about your experience. Take care of yourself! Have a great day! ❤
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Thanks Cheryl, and it’s a lovely 30’C day here in Geelong.. 💙🌏
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This is very moving and can be interpreted in a number of different ways, I think…
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Yes indeed Ingrid, this is my reply for Colleen…. and my words could be about a person lying in a hospital bed, after suffering a stroke, hearing the voices around him, and he unable to speak or stand… thinking that this is the end……
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Incredible Ivor. Like the others, I can interpret this in so many ways.
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Thank you Colleen, and my words could be about a person lying in a hospital bed, after suffering a stroke, hearing the voices around him, and he unable to speak or stand… thinking that this is the end……
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How frightening. SO personal for you, yet relatable to so many. It makes me think of a young mother who had something happen at work, it was if her entire body froze, she could hear everyone but could not respond. So scary for her.
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Definitely scary Colleen… hopefully there’s no more… 😀😎
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Hopefully indeed. And I hope your greenery is making your little world brighter.
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My greenery is thriving with Hope glowing brighter
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Trapped in the experience of being in the body …this is what came to my mind. That poem is written so beautifully.
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Yes Indeed Pragalbha, .. and my words could be about a person lying in a hospital bed, after suffering a stroke, hearing the voices around him, and he unable to speak or stand… thinking that this is the end……😀😎
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Ivor,
This is such a powerful poem. So few words, so much to feel. You have captured part of the human experience.
Thanks for sharing about the writing circles. It is a passion of mine to connect writers across the globe. Writing together enriches all of us. Peace to you.
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The “writing circle” has been an enriching experience for me Ali… Thank you… and I’ve just signed up for the 21st…😀
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I am glad to hear you are inspired.
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Yes .. my spirit-bird soars…
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How utterly terrifying that must have been
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Yes indeed Beth… and bewildered….
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Powerful write, Ivor! Can’t even imagine the fear, uncertainty, wondering that you went through.
I hope those tending to you did hear you…by reading your beautiful eyes.
Wowza…you wrote this in 5 minutes! ‘Tis a 5-minute Masterpiece!
(((HUGS)))
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Life is longer than ‘5’ minutes…. but my recollections seemed realistically surreal… the situation was nearly too difficult to explain…. and my progress in life still has me wondering..
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our minds are often, at conflict with other parts of us, the mind wants something, the body wants another, the soul, something else, and our hearts, something, entirely unrelated, nowhere NEAR what those three other “parts’ are longing for, thus, we get into, major conflicts, with our, selves…and there’s, NO way of avoiding it!
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We are so pleased you survived all that
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Haha… so am I young Derrick…
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🙂
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Your words seem to be a memory of difficult times, personally. Nicely rendered.
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Thank you Eugenia…. Yes very difficult times they were ☺
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your ‘writing circle’ is obviously a great creative sanctuary for you Ivor!
Trying to describe such a frightening experience isn’t easy, but this feels unsettling, so you conveyed the tension well 🙂
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Thanks Kate… I’ve often wanted to convey those thoughts from 20 years ago… somehow the “writing circle’ seemed to create a place for these words to evolve… in a thoughtful and powerful way… 😀😎
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exactly what you need, that nurturing safe place. I don’t believe we really work thru the emotions of those situations until we can share them! Sure we might physically recover but the shock sits deep until we work thru it 🙂
It’s a healthy release 🙂
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Yes Kate… It was good to express the situation so truly and clearly… 😊
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The uncertainty of situation in the poem conveys an emotional truth of reality of human emotions in both difficult and chaotic times. Simply superb!
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Yes indeed Henry… this is a true personal experience, that I fortunately recovered from…
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It’s a nice poetic recollection.
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Very nice Ivor. I like the shadow showing up at the end! Very haunting!
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