An Old Plumber, An Ex-Carer, An Amateur Poet, Words From The Heart
Whales Cry Too (a Mariannet)
In those ignorant olden days Who would have wanted to be a whale? Who threw that harpoon into my back?
Whales Cry Too (a Mariannet*)
I
Hear them cry
…..When horrific harpoons pierce their hides
…..My heart bleeds from inside
……….Seeing whales so cruelly killed
The name “Mariannet” was recently ‘coined’ by Paul (of Paul’s Poetry Playground) >> [ Invented Poetry Forms – The Mariannet – Paul’s Poetry Playground ] for the previously unnamed poetic form that the poet Marianne Moore created to write her classic poem “The Fish” first published in 1918. The form was invented over a hundred years ago and is relatively unknown to most poets. The mariannet is an isosyllabic rhyming poem, consisting of one or more five-line stanzas (quintains) with one syllable in the first line, three in the second, nine in the third, six in the fourth, and eight in the fifth and final line. The first two lines rhyme with each other, and so does the third and fourth, but the fifth is nonrhyming and does not rhyme with any other lines. Thus its rhyme scheme can be expressed as aabbx for each individual quintain (with x representing the nonrhyming line). In Moore’s original formatting of the form, the third and fourth lines were indented five spaces and the fifth ten spaces. I have attached Marianne Moore’s poem “The Fish”, below Lisa Hannigan’s music/video.
“The Fish” – by Marianne Moore
wade through black jade. Of the crow-blue mussel-shells, one keeps adjusting the ash-heaps; opening and shutting itself like
an injured fan. The barnacles which encrust the side of the wave, cannot hide there for the submerged shafts of the
sun, split like spun glass, move themselves with spotlight swiftness into the crevices— in and out, illuminating
the turquoise sea of bodies. The water drives a wedge of iron through the iron edge of the cliff; whereupon the stars,
pink rice-grains, ink- bespattered jelly fish, crabs like green lilies, and submarine toadstools, slide each on the other.
All external marks of abuse are present on this defiant edifice— all the physical features of
ac- cident—lack of cornice, dynamite grooves, burns, and hatchet strokes, these things stand out on it; the chasm-side is
dead. Repeated evidence has proved that it can live on what can not revive its youth. The sea grows old in it.
G'day, and welcome to my blog site. My name is Ivor Steven, I live in Geelong, Australia. I'm an ex-industrial chemist, and a retired plumber, and a former Carer of my wife(Carole), for 30 years, who suffered from severe MS. I Write poetry about those personal thoughts, throughout and beyond my life as a Carer.
I've been blogging for over 2 years, and writing poems for 19 years. Of course a lot of my poems are about my favourite subject Carole, but since I've been blogging my writings have become quite varied, humourous, mystical, observational, and even a few monster/horror poems.
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Interesting format!
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Yes indeed Dale … and I would give it go 🤗🌏
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Ha! I’m not really a poet. I try now and again, but it doesn’t come naturally.
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It’s sooo sad. beautiful poetry Ivor! 💖
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Thank you Cindy 🤗🌏🐋🐳💕
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It’s always a pleasure Ivor! 💖💖
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still pleasure and pain for me Cindy …
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the song says it all Ivor. 💖💖💖
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heartbreaking
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Yes 🐋🐳
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I like the way you explains the form of this poem. I hope I will learn a lot from you Ivor20 👌
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Thank you kindly Queen 🤗🐋
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Nicely done – a powerful message, too
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Thank you Derrick 🤗🐋🐳
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Beautifully done and with an important message. I love the song.
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Thank you Eugenia for introducing me to this interesting format 🤗🌏📒
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Most welcome, Ivor! 💕
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Nicely done, Ivor 🙂
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Thank you Sue 📒🤗🐋
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They do. Aw, a heart-toucher. Also, powerful message and beautifully written/and format.
(((HUGS)))
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Happy Birthday Week Carolyn … thank you for thoughtful words …. ((Hugs)) 🌏🐋💙📘
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An interesting form with an interesting history! And I share your sentiments on whaling ☹️
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Thank you for reading Ingrid my lengthy article ..
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Thank you for reblogging my poem on your fabulous site 🤗🐋🐳🌏
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